Pride & Prejudice Sample Essay Response 1

Essay C: From the onset, the writer makes it very clear who he is going to write about, Mrs. Bennet, and does a great job in leading into the introduction of the topic. He mentions he is going to be making a reference to Mrs. Bennet and base the essay off of her and never really gets side tracked. Throughout the essay, the writer constantly refers every argument/point stated directly back to Mrs. Bennet, only strengthening the analysis. However, i do think the thesis is a bit to long and could be shortened. I also think the thesis is too vague in that the writer does not state the gist of what will be discussed in the essay. She rather illustrates the reasoning behind Mrs. Bennet's "big mouth" besides outlining the essay for the reader. The writer does bring up good points in the body paragraphs but nothing that refers back to the thesis.